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It began as a shapeless lump,
A little heat softened it,
So that it could be formed.
It has its own will,
Resistant in some places,
Compliant in others.
The work is not easy,
To the limit is sometimes takes me,
Yet, I keep working.

With strong hands I form it,
Subtle, careful strength when needed,
Blunt and deliberate when necessary,
Always with a discerning eye,
For while its mettle may be strong,
Its spirit is brittle.
Too much pressure in one place,
Will break it,
Force uncalled for,
Can leave it forever scarred.

With loving hands I polish,
Smoothing the rough edges,
Repairing minor damage here and there.
But I am far from done,
Many years this will take.
But one day,
I will be able to step back,
View all the effort of my work,
And say,
“I am proud of you son.”
Photo taking in my back yard with props from around the house.

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kenzie Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2004
Definitely interesting. I love the way the reader really does think you're talking about a material, a craft [clearly something you care about] until you realize it's a person. Excellent.
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rcybergeek Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2004
Thanks.
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heatherlovatt Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2004
Wonderfully sung.

Heather
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euphoria Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2004
This was very touching...I liked it immensely. =) I think the form and verse is simplistic, but I think it fits here. Very, Very Very good. You just made my short favorites list. ;)
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rcybergeek Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2004
Thanks.
I thought this was one of my better poems, but few people seem to have read it. I am glad you like it.
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livingbyair Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
simple enough. :)
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meic2 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2003
This reduced me to tears. I think you know why.
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rcybergeek Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2003
I am sorry that it brings up hurtful memories.
It was certainly not my intention to make people sad.
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meic2 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2003
Not at all ... it was a beautiful poem. And pain is a part of life which I accept.
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rcybergeek Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2003
Thank you.
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